shame
so stern the expression he quietly wore;
the mirrored image of shaken faith.
eyes searching out for something more,
yet unable to find peace or feel safe.
it was in the hidden dances, secret affairs,
and arrogant attainments of his stride.
in his transient desires, his travelers' cares,
he lost sight of the man he kept inside.
the reflection made it so saliently clear;
his castles had fallen to a barbarians' play.
that was the first time he had felt such fear,
for when God showed him his heart...
it turned away.
Good rhyme, excellent word choice and subject matter. Well penned. (One small thing, L12, shouldn't it be 'showed' not 'should' i.e. "when God 'showed' him his heart"? I always blame the darn "spell correct!!")
ReplyDeletehaha ur absolutely correct. thx for the correction.
Delete... and pride usually goeth before the fall.
ReplyDelete(I agree with Ms. Ginny)
Oooooo....
ReplyDeleteI'm glad he sees God's heart and the expression goes away.
ReplyDeleteI trie to choose a stanza that I was drawn to the most, but I couldn't except for perhaps the 2nd one. Talented writer Michael.
ReplyDeleteReally like that last line.
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beautifully written - & yes, i suppose there are times when all of us, on being shown our hearts, have turned away in shame
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